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> [Nin/Taijutsu] Indomitable
IzzetDragon
 Posted: Jun 26 2018, 03:44 PM
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Name: Indomitable

Rank: B

Jutsu Type: Ninjutsu/Bukijutsu

Range: Medium

Element: None

Requirements: Conqueror (fighting style); 50 speed and agility naturally; long bladed weapon; Quick (Optional)

Description: When performed, to say you need exceptional perception is an understatement, for you not only need to follow your own attacks but those of the opposition as you defend yourself. Using the principles of Conqueror, the user can slash out with chakra infusing their blade to slice at whatever is within double the reach of the blade in every direction, thus creating a safe zone of defense. For every 10 points in agility the user can initiate a slash in their defense. With such swiftness on display it creates a marvel of white lines in the air around the user, in varying directions, as it swings through the air to cut or deflect whatever it hits; the tougher the threat the more speed and agility needed. The faster the blade moves the greater it's potential for slicing.

Limitations:
-Without being able to see what you're defending against an attack could make it through rather easily as precision is key.

Weaknesses:
-While this has the potential to slice up many things that comes into its range it's not inherently offensive; the user is unable to move when they initiate it and while they are using it. This cannot be removed.

Drawbacks:
-Continuous use can exhaust the user greatly, leaving a temporary debuff of 10 stamina after each use until they rest. This cannot be removed.

Creator: Uchiha Lapis

Cost: 60

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N tha Darth
 Posted: Jul 4 2018, 04:10 AM
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Link the requirement jutsu or styles please.

Also you need to slow down on the "cut through anything"

"If the sword can affect chakra, it can cut through just"

How it affects chakra is vague. I think if a sword can legitimately can significantly interact with the chakra or element of a jutsu, it would be fine to just use it with this jutsu for favorable results on what would be a case by case basis.... without this statement in here
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IzzetDragon
 Posted: Jul 4 2018, 06:55 AM
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Try and shorten the text load only to be.... http://files.b1.jcink.com/html/emoticons/dry.gif ....can't even get one please http://files.b1.jcink.com/html/emoticons/sad.gif

That's an outside force clause not part of the effect so going into great detail about what happens to chakra should the blade be capable of doing it seems trivial...such a blade isn't required to use this...besides if it's anti-chakra we know what happens just ask everyone's friend Samehada http://files.b1.jcink.com/html/emoticons/wink.gif

If that line's a problem I'll take it out, it'll be obvious when it happens anyway what such a blade will do to a fireball if sliced up a couple of times

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N tha Darth
 Posted: Jul 4 2018, 01:57 PM
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Looking at it again, I have more questions:
1. Are you getting a range of 10feet on every strike?
2. With the required base of 50 points and a buff of 20 to agility, are you saying that a use of this jutsu would be able to do 7 strikes in any angle, all with 10feet range?

Or

The jutsu is a 10feet all directions dome of unfocused slashing at nothing , but with the 70 points, you can do 7 strikes inside this unfocused dome at anything that made it through?
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IzzetDragon
 Posted: Jul 4 2018, 10:14 PM
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Unfocused slash at nothing???

No, these are blocks/deflections, there's an actual attack being blocked by the swing. Think of a barrage of shuriken coming at you from all around, using your number 7 shuriken, using this would deflect all 7 if the user has 70 agility. Anything less and the weakness comes into effect, more and well it doesn't matter.

1. Yes it 10 feet radius

2. Yes, though 20 only pertains to the use of Quick

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N tha Darth
 Posted: Jul 10 2018, 04:21 PM
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You need to take out the mention of quick's boost. Just say it can be used with Quick without any drop in the speed gains.

Are you saying the jutsu cannot be used offensively, i.e. without an opponent first initiating the attack that this responds to?

Where is 10ft range of each strike coming from ? Chakra ? Increased sword or limb length? The wind ?
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IzzetDragon
 Posted: Jul 10 2018, 06:47 PM
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Sure

Well it's in defense of the user why would they waste chakra and stamina otherwise. Sure if they run into the user it can be very harmful but then it's just like it's predecessors

Well I didn't add an element so chakra of course, using such quick over exaggerated swings with chakra extends it reach

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N tha Darth
 Posted: Jul 11 2018, 06:02 PM
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If you take 10ft off and replace with "double the length of the user's sword", I'll stamp it.
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IzzetDragon
 Posted: Jul 12 2018, 02:23 AM
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http://files.b1.jcink.com/html/emoticons/blink.gif http://files.b1.jcink.com/html/emoticons/sad.gif

Alright

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 Posted: Jul 12 2018, 03:37 AM
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Approved.
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