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> [Genin] Uzumaki, Nezuel
Nezuel
 Posted: May 11 2018, 05:53 PM
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Biographical Information


Name: Uzumaki, Nezuel

Clan: Uzumaki

Age: 16

Gender: Male

Ninja Status:

Rank: Genin

Height: 5'8" // 1.72 meters

Weight: 160lbs // 72.57kg
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Pale skin, red eyes, and red hair are characteristics that separate Nezuel from other children of the same age yet identifies him as one who has inherited Uzumaki blood. His hair is long, for a boy, reaching farther than his ears and yet not quite reaching his shoulders, content to stay somewhere between and sometimes tucked behind his ears. While standing at an impressive height the genin is also rather slim. It seems that he has issues with nourishment or simply issues gaining weight. His face is gaunt and his body, while stronger than any normal humans due to his shinobi trainning, is weaker than most shinobi of the same rank.


Personality: Nezuel is, like all people in this world, a series of contradictions wrapped in a question and tied with an enigma. To most people, he is sullen and withdrawn, more likely to find himself within the pages of a book than the words of a conversation. When things get serious his mind becomes more focused, qualifying and quantifying what needs to be done, resources, ways, and methods to get the job done while also evaluating the cost of each and the chances of success. Yet if one gets to know him they may find him a bit softer and a bit kinder than others would suggest. He is not above jokes, even bad ones, should the occasion call for it. He is, after all, only human.

Background Born a child to a mother and father obsessed with ninjutsu and the shinobi ways Nezuel was left alone for most of his childhood. He would spend his days attending school and learning how to be a shinobi and by night sneaking into his parent's room while they were away on missions and taking their ninjua scrolls to learn more. History and jutsu knowledge passed through his mind day after day. He knew how to world worked before his other classmates, knew that one day his parents would go out on a mission and wouldn't return. When it happened he found himself less saddened by the deaths of those he almost considered strangers and more determined to stop such an event from happening again. Determined to let not a single shred of the knowledge his parents possesed go to waste he delved into their most dangerous of ninjutsu and fuuinjutsu scrolls, those kept locked and hidden away by their seals, broken now that their deaths had come to pass.

He took time away from the academy, the place giving him time to greive the death of his family It had already been atleast a week in constant studying, not even eating, drinking, or sleeping, before the event that changed his life came to pass. Within the items that his parents had left him he found something that would change his shinobi career. Unknown to him that scroll contained the knowledge of his parent's strongest two jutsus. Within a few moments, the words upon the scroll somehow moved imprinted themselves onto him, sealing themselves due to some defence within the scroll, or perhaps bloodline technique to pass on knowledge. Either way, he found himself a month later in the hospital with a diamond shaped mark upon his forehead. Once he was released he found his chakra stunted, he found himself getting tired easier. Whatever he had found had made him weaker and he had no idea how to stop it.

From there his only option was to try and become a better shinobi, try to understand what had happened to him more. It took him more time than he had liked, he got lower marks than he wished...but he eventually graduated and became a genin...one step closer to regaining what he had lost.

Combat Information


Available Ninja Points:

Inventory:

Inventory Ninja Points:

Traits:

Trait Ninja Points: 16

Seal the Deal - D-rank - 1NP
Description: The user has become more effective in the use of fuuinjutsu through extensive study and practice
Benefit: +15 to Chakra Manipulation when performing Fuuinjutsu.

Fuuinjutsu Specialty - D-rank - 1NP
Description: The user has trained extensively in the use of their chosen fighting style theme, and can use jutsu of that theme for less chakra than normal. Can only be taken for one theme.
Benefit: Jutsu of the chosen theme cost 10% less than normal (Cost Rounded down)

Fuuinjutsu Specialist - C-rank - 2NP
Description: The user has focused even further on their chosen fighting style theme, allowing them to mold it properly for less chakra than before. Requires
Fuuinjutsu Specialty Specialty. Can only be taken for one theme.
Benefit: Jutsu of the chosen theme cost 15% less than normal in total with the other trait (Cost Rounded down)

Fuuinjutsu Elite - B-rank - 4NP
Description: The user has focused even further on their chosen theme, allowing them to mold it properly for less chakra than before. Requires Fuuinjutsu Specialist. Can only be taken for one theme.
Benefit: Jutsu of the chosen theme cost 20% less than normal in total with the other traits (Cost Rounded down)

Byakugou no In [Strength of a Hundred Seal] Adept C-rank - 2NP
Description: The user has trained extensively in the use of the chosen jutsu, giving it more power and making it more cost effective to use. This trait can only be initially taken on a jutsu two ranks or more above that of the user (The user must actually have that jutsu on their profile) The user must have maximum Spirit attribute for their rank to take this trait.
Benefit: User does not suffer the cost or power penalty for using this jutsu if it is two ranks above their own. When they reach a rank where the penalty is no longer incurred, the jutsu costs 10% less to cast, and is 10% more powerful.

Hiraishin no Jutsu [Flying Thunder God Technique] Adept C-rank - 2NP
Description: The user has trained extensively in the use of the chosen jutsu, giving it more power and making it more cost effective to use. This trait can only be initially taken on a jutsu two ranks or more above that of the user (The user must actually have that jutsu on their profile) The user must have maximum Spirit attribute for their rank to take this trait.
Benefit: User does not suffer the cost or power penalty for using this jutsu if it is two ranks above their own. When they reach a rank where the penalty is no longer incurred, the jutsu costs 10% less to cast, and is 10% more powerful.

Hiraishin no Jutsu [Flying Thunder God Technique] Prodigy B-rank - 4NP
Description: Requires Hiraishin no Jutsu [Flying Thunder God Technique] Adept. This carries the same benefits as the predecessor, but for jutsu 3 ranks above the user. As with the predecessor, you must actually possess the jutsu, must have maximum spirit for your RPC rank, and must take this trait when you’d normally incur the penalty.
Benefit: No penalty in chakra cost or power is incurred for using a jutsu three ranks above your own. When you have reached the rank where no penalty is incurred, that jutsu will cost 20% less and be 20% more powerful.

Attributes:

Strength: 10
Speed: 10
Agility: 25
Perception: 25
Endurance: 10
Willpower: 10
Spirituality: 25
Stamina: 10

Attribute Ninja Points: 25

Chakra: 391 (250 + 100 + 41)

Skills:

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Chakra Manipulation: (15 Fuin)
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Chakra Control: 40
Enhanced Sense (Enter Sense):
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Skill Ninja Points: 4

Chakra Natures: Earth

Chakra Nature Ninja Points: 0

Jutsu:

Nawanuke no Jutsu [Rope Escape Technique] (Trained Basic)
Rank: E
Description: This technique allows one to escape from ropes and wires tied to prevent their escape. This is done by using chakra to physically loosen or to sever the ropes. This technique does not require handseals.
Limitations: This technique does not work on heavy restraints or those made of chakra. This limitation cannot be removed.
Cost: 5 Chakra

Shuriken Boujou [Shuriken Intercept] (Trained Basic)
Rank: E
Description: The user throws a projectile in such a way that it strikes another projectile in midair. Skilled users of this technique can even throw their projectiles in such a way as to purposefully change the direction of both projectiles.
Cost: -

Chouyaku [Leap] (Trained Basic)
Rank: E
Description: The user focuses chakra to their legs, allowing them to leap higher and further than they'd naturally be capable of. Using this technique, a ninja can easily leap to the top of a light pole, or jump across a wide road. This technique does not require handseals.
Cost: 5 Chakra

Ki Nobori [Tree Walking] (Trained Basic)
Rank: C
Description: By focusing chakra to one's feet, a ninja can adhere themselves to sheer surfaces, such as trees, walls, cliffs, and can even walk upside down. This technique is usually used through the feet, but may be used from any body part. If this technique is known by a Chuunin or higher shinobi, it does not require concentration. This technique does not require handseals.
Cost: 20 to activate; 5 to maintain

Suimen no Hokou [Water Surface Walking] (Trained Basic)
Rank: C
Description: By emitting a constant stream of chakra from the user's feet, the user may walk on the surface of water as if it was solid. This technique is usually used through the feet, but may be used from any body part. If this technique is known by a Chuunin or higher shinobi, it does not require concentration. This technique does not require handseals.
Cost: 20 to activate; 5 to maintan

Genjutsu Kai [Mind Technique Release] (Trained Basic)
Rank: C
Description: While holding the Rat seal, the user forcibly halts their chakra flow, then rapidly rushes a greater amount of chakra to their head. This process disperses the chakra causing a Genjutsu to occur, and can break it in such a fashion.
- You must be able to form the Rat handseal.
- You must break every Genjutsu effect on a single genjutsu at once, though if you are affected by multiple Genjutsu, you may choose which Genjutsu to target.
- You do NOT need to break an Aftershock effect.
- You do NOT need to break effects that your stats are allowing you to ignore the cost of.
- Even those incapable of learning Ninjutsu or Genjutsu can use Genjutsu Kai.
- Genjutsu Kai may be used on another individual by contact. Other than the required handseal, all rules for Genjutsu Kai must still be followed while using it in this way.
Cost: The cost of the Genjutsu being countered + the cost of any active side-effects + 5 chakra for the base effect and any unaffected side effects

Shunshin no Jutsu [Body Flicker Technique] (Trained Basic)
Rank: C
Description: The user holds a single seal and focuses their chakra for a few seconds. The user immediately moves to a new location, moving so fast that they appear to teleport. This is just chakra-assisted movement, however. This technique usually employs some sort of cover to further hide the user's movements. This technique may be used to move vertically, but it must begin while the user is on a surface they can push off of.
Limitations:
- The user cannot change direction once their movement has begun.
- The user cannot react to threats during their movement. This limitation cannot be removed.
- There must be no obstructions between the user and their intended end location. This limitation cannot be removed.
- This technique has a range limit of 20 feet. This limitation cannot be removed, only extended.
- If no cover is used, the opponent may see the user leaning in the direction they intended to go.
Cost: 25 Chakra


Fuuin Kai [Seal Release] (Trained Basic)
Rank: E
Requirements: Scroll
Description: The user places their palm on a scroll or similar object that contains a seal. Using chakra, the user can unseal the scroll, obtaining whatever was hidden within.
Cost: 5 Chakra per object unsealed

Byakugou no In [Strength of a Hundred Seal]
Rank: A
Requirements: Access to Medical Ninjutsu ; At least 20 Chakra Control
Description: This technique allows a user to store chakra within a single point on their body, typically the forehead, over a vast period of time. In doing so, a diamond shaped seal is formed at the point chosen. This seal is constantly draining the user's chakra, though the user can release the seal via the In'fuuin: Kai technique, and regain all chakra drained. The chakra gathered in this seal is considered separate from the user's normal chakra pool, and is therefore not taken into account when the user's normal chakra levels are restored. Additionally, the chakra within this seal cannot be drained until released.
Seal Description: A purple diamond shape, usually on the user's forehead
Limitations: The seal can only hold up to 2000 Chakra. This limitation cannot be removed, only extended to 3000.

Hiraishin no Jutsu [Flying Thunder God Technique]
Rank: S
Requirements: Moderator Approval (Restricted Concept) ; 2 AA Points
Description: The user places a unique marking formula on any object their hand comes into contact with. After placing the seal, the user can teleport to the seal at any time. No aspect of this technique requires handseals. Multiple seals may be placed at once, and while the mark may fade, the seal itself never does, allowing the user to teleport to that seal forever. The user may also transport others with him or her, so long as those other people are touching the user or his chakra.
Seal Description: Unique to the user, but typically 4 inches long, 1 inch wide
Cost: 50 to place seal; 30 to teleport (cost of teleportation applies to every person being teleported)

Jutsu Ninja Points: 17

Special Abilities: In addition to possessing a greater life force for abilities that rely on it, members of the Senju and Uzumaki clans gain 1 additional point of Chakra for every 3 Attribute Points they possess

Advanced Abilities: 2 - FTG 1 - Reserve

Advanced Ability Ninja Points: 6

Spent Ninja Points: 68
Remaining Ninja Points:

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ZacDesu
 Posted: May 15 2018, 02:12 AM
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Other than the huge elephant in the room that says that you have an A rank Jutsu and an S rank Jutsu in your arsenal at Genin rank, try to incorporate that into your background as this is a HUGE deal.

I know it's still a work in progress and whatnot.

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Nezuel
 Posted: May 15 2018, 05:44 AM
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This might be done?

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 Posted: May 15 2018, 10:56 AM
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Height - You realize that he's absolutely massive, right? Like ridiculously big. Like professional basketball player big. Of all the characters in Naruto who were given heights (ALL of them, side characters, characters we never met, etc), only 6 are taller, and one of them isn't even from Naruto, he's from Boruto. This is a massive 16 year old, and it seems really odd to not even mention the fact that he's so weirdly huge beyond calling his height "impressive". Honestly, if I met someone that tall, that would be the first and most prominent thing I noticed, long before how skinny he was or what color his hair was.

Weight - His weight, given his height, is normal; which wouldn't be a problem, except your appearance makes it a point that he should be underweight.

Traits - Please identify the rank of the various traits. I don't know about my mods, but I definitely don't have the full trait list memorized, so it's kind of difficult to accurately count your traits without knowing what rank they are. Also, you left the word "adept" off of one of your Hiraishin traits.

Chakra Nature - Even if you don't intend to use it, you still have one. Pick one of the five please.

Jutsu - If you're starting at genin, you should have at least 3 of the AS basics. You're entitled to any/as many that you have previously trained, however. That goes for the genin basics as well, you're entitled to any that you've trained.

Special Abilities - As an Uzumaki, you should have one. Check out the clan page.

Advanced Abilities - These numbers seem off. Each AA point costs 1 more NP than the one before it. FTG is 2 AA; The first AA is 1 NP, the second is 2 NP, for a total of 3 NP, rather than 6. For it to be 6, you'd need to be buying 3 AA points.

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Nezuel
 Posted: May 16 2018, 04:24 AM
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edits were made

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ZacDesu
 Posted: May 17 2018, 12:50 AM
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Then without further ado, I dub you Sir-

Oh just go post already.

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 Posted: May 17 2018, 11:34 AM
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Approved, since Zac didn't close or move this. http://files.b1.jcink.com/html/emoticons/sleep.gif

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